Objective: use is the appropriate term, not utilize.
E & T: Looks fine, I prefer a colon between the degree and school, but that is my preference.
H of Q:
1. Dump considerable, sounds overstated. Use "Licensed" as you are a Licensed Practical Nurse.
2. Excellent performer...doesn't really mean anything to me. Skilled should work just fine and doesn't sound overstated.
5. I would change ethical and non-judgemental to "Culturally sensitive" and dump the rest. Claiming to be non-judgemental sounds to me as bad as saying you never make errors. We all have our times when we need to sit back and recognize if we are being judgemental or not, so better to not state something that really isn't true.
6. Clumsy wording, perhaps "Strong organizational and multi-tasking skills"
7. Dump "possess" because grammatically it would be "Posseses" based on previous subject and tense, which then sort of makes the sentence look ironically wrong.
9. Just punctual. Always on time is repetitive.
10. Perhaps something more descriptive. Understands the importance of meeting deadlines. However, this sounds more administrative than nursing, so perhaps something like "Values timely administration of medications, assessments, and charting."
1. Tighten it up. Nurse managers know what ADL's are, just state you can perform the duty, no need to describe.
9. Dump the Hep B, it's not a selling point.
I would ditch the whole clinical section. They know you have to do clinicals to get your license.
Relevant Employment: Ok
Other Employment: Would make me think you only stay in a job for about six months on average. Might be worth ditching that whole section.
References: Most guides now state not to even include this as all employers understand references are available. See this guide for more helpful hints: http://www.dailywritingtips.com/resume-writing-tips/
Cover Letter: Avoid adverbs. Passion is not generally assumed to be "real or unreal" you are generally passionate or not. Dump extraneous adverbs like "very". They don't truly add
Once again remove utilize. It is an unprofessional use of the word "use".
Double check capitalization. I am a recent graduate from Norquest College with a diploma as a Licensed Practical Nurse in the Practical Nurse program."
Have you sat for your boards yet? This is not clear.
"As a teaching facility and a variety of clinical settings,"
Tenses and subjects need clarification throughout. Who is a teaching facility?
Perhaps something like "I am aware that your facility offers a variety of clinical settings, and would offer me the opportunity to gain a varied experience."
Through my clinical practicum's I have also gained the experience in medication administration.
Remove the apostrophe in practicum.
OP: Sorry if this comes across as "OMG psycho edits" but I take it seriously that if you say "I have strong written communication skills" that you show that in clarity of context and meaning in your writing.
Take the edits as you will, look over some resources, and best of luck in your endeavors!!
My little minty delight, allow me to provide some feedback. I'm able to figure out your Xs, *s, and #s, so I assure you, I am understanding properly as I type this.
My belief here is that you are positing your success with your job hunt has a lot to do with securing the interview with your resume. I'm inclined to agree, however, now that I am seeing it, I'm seeing good things and bad things. Allow me to share my thoughts as advice for future searches, not as criticism (I assure you, this is not criticism).
First, some background on me - I'm a 30-something who came to nursing after trying other areas first. Like many people, my younger days were bartending and retail, but then I moved on to some unusual/unique roles, and more professional roles. I won't be more specific than that because the combination of unique and professional roles will quickly identify who I am to those who know me.
For my track record on resume and cover letter writing, I have literally NEVER been passed over for an interview. Every single time I have submitted my own letter and resume, I have sat for an interview.
Out of every interview I have sat for, I have been offered a job every time except twice.
The first time, I was a tiny 19 year old hot chick who looked 15 applying for a job as a corrections officer. It was the right decision.
The second time, I applied for a nursing scholarship/residency program at a tiny hospital that doesn't have women's health or pediatrics. The interviewers sized me up and thought I wouldn't stay there after my contractual obligation because these populations weren't served there. I was actually pretty angry over this as by this time, I'd decided against both specialties. But, their HR/recruiter called AND emailed stating that you normally get a Dear John letter, but they were so impressed by me and my resume that they really struggled to make the decision to not hire me. Ironically, I've been on an adult critical care unit very happily.
My current job, first one in healthcare, I competed against 250 applicants for four slots. Some of those applicants already worked there. Since ICU wasn't taking on a resident nurse that year, my unit was the one to get. My resume got me in the door with 24 other applicants, my interview sealed the deal.
My point here is that I am my only resource in the format and feedback I am about to share. I hope I am legitimized by my track record.
Now, regarding your letter. You took the time to look up the organization. You stated an example of how you embody their vision/mission. That is a wonderful way to connect yourself with the organization showing how you are already part of their team. I find it may also help to look up something they're working on, or something that has been in the news. Show some enthusiasm regarding that goal or accomplishment.
For the letter itself, it absolutely has to be one page. It needs to be strongly worded regarding how awesome you are, but how humbled you are to receive this opportunity. NO ONE will brag about you, so you should. Not in an annoying way, of course. But don't hold back. If you've achieved something, mention it. Don't be "that guy" though. If you ONLY brag, you're going to be that guy who is unwilling to learn, adjust to change, show humility, show vulnerability, make mistakes with some grace and transparency.
You need to close this letter as though you've already got the job, and all the interview is is an opportunity to talk about it. I think it's very strong to end with, "I look forward to meeting with you soon and discussing our future together!" It tells the reader you already see yourself as part of the organization. It says you're committed to this opportunity.
Now, for the resume. Again, concise is good. If you need two pages, make the second page education and awards. The fact that you have a degree in nursing is obvious if you're applying for a nursing job. And, we nurses tend to be overachievers, so awards are nice to add, but not as important as the professional experiences you've had and your personal statement.
On the work experience, list your relevant job experience. No one wants to read through the 19 restaurants you blew through in your teens and early 20s. Relevant jobs should leave little to no gaps in employment years, go back a minimum of ten years, if applicable, and every job experience should be able to be described with strong nursing buzz words. Time management, leader, delegation, organization, responsibility, prioritization, customer service, multi-tasking, high-speed environment, management, management of employees, engaging, development of interpersonal relationships, budgeting, etc. Many jobs can include these buzz words. Heck, one of my unique jobs, you'd NEVER imagine I could relate that to nursing buzz words, but I did. Gotta think outside the box. You can't by obvious about it, of course. You just need to fit some of those words in and trust me, they'll be noticed.
So for jobs, you briefly describe your duties, and then you briefly describe the skills you gained. After all, we are all evolving as we start every new adventure.
Now, this individual post is enormous already, so I'm going to put the end result of all of this rambling in my next comment.
Last edit by ixchel on Feb 25, '16 : Reason: I'm going to find the guy who invented autocorrect and I'm going to kick his dog.